What stays with me is how you let survival arrive without spectacle. The restraint matters β the way you protect innocence while still naming what was taken. The emergence is quiet, bodily, and earned.
This piece speaks volumes about resilience and the human spirit. The imagery of being "forged in fire; forged in flame" is incredibly powerful, capturing the pain of a past while celebrating the strength found in emergence. A beautiful and inspiring read! Andrea, I want you to know that you were, are and always will be brave πͺπ»π₯Ή
This is so lovely, which is so impressive with such heavy material. The words protect an innocence within the forge that really reaches in⦠and that is so powerful.
Sounds like coming back to life! The rhymes and assonance hit hard, in a way the voiceover can't do justice to. "A lien against her innocence" is a clever way indeed to describe what she is breaking free from. Kudos!
Andrea, this feels carefully held.
What stays with me is how you let survival arrive without spectacle. The restraint matters β the way you protect innocence while still naming what was taken. The emergence is quiet, bodily, and earned.
βForged in fireβ could have tipped into clichΓ©, but here it doesnβt β because the poem stays with breath and presence rather than triumph, and you've done that so well.
Thank you for trusting this piece to be both gentle and strong at the same time.
Thank you so much for your thoughtful feedback! I really appreciate it! HI hope you have a great day
You show exceptional restraint. A powerful poem.
Thank you so much Maria <3
No pun intended?
π maybe it slipped
I really liked the opening in this:
"Here she is again today,
lonely in un-lonely ways."
Lonely in un-lonely ways. It's interesting and unique.
Thank you so much <3 This line is one of my favorites.
What a strong resilient voice, reflecting a fiery soul. Thank you for your heart dear Andreaππ
Thank you so much for reading and commenting <3
My pleasure !
This piece speaks volumes about resilience and the human spirit. The imagery of being "forged in fire; forged in flame" is incredibly powerful, capturing the pain of a past while celebrating the strength found in emergence. A beautiful and inspiring read! Andrea, I want you to know that you were, are and always will be brave πͺπ»π₯Ή
Thank you so much for your insightful comments Pae! It means so much!
That's really a intense situational poem.
I really love how you depicted the girl's situation when she is bounded and her struggles too.
Thanks for sharing and keep writing π«
Just highlighting this part
She emerges from the coals.
Forged in fire; forged in flame;
She is found;
Unbound.
Β©2018 Andrea
Thank you so much for your comments and thank you for reading!
This is so lovely, which is so impressive with such heavy material. The words protect an innocence within the forge that really reaches in⦠and that is so powerful.
Thank you so much for sharing π©΅
Thank you so much for your thoughtful comments Stephanie! <3 <3
Very well written. I very much like the way it flows. Each stanza works in tandem with the other.
Thank you so much for your awesome feedback Dorie! <3
Wow. I really felt this one. Vain not rhyming with anything in its stanza was particularly strong. Thanks for sharing.
Thank you for feedback! I think that vain line really acts as a break point. From there the emotion hangs in the air and acts as a strong pivot.
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Also, I'm the 100th lucky person to receive this powerful piece. Thank you for sharing.
Thatβs amazing! <3 <3
Sounds like coming back to life! The rhymes and assonance hit hard, in a way the voiceover can't do justice to. "A lien against her innocence" is a clever way indeed to describe what she is breaking free from. Kudos!
Thank you!
Andrea, you are my favorite poet! π©·
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HI Andrea! So painful and so beautiful at the same time. Felt accessible. Thank you.
Thank you so much for your comments <3
of course!
Thank you for sharing this Andrea!
thank you!
Beautiful, and very suited to the Year of the Fire Horse <3
Thank you so much Lani!
I love the rhyme scheme and form!
Thank you for reading and enjoying!